This entry is submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally Week 49!
Through the thick cover,
diffusing in the air,
bitter sensation it triggered.
Claustrophobic it seemed at first.
Now relieves to the core,
chilling the bones to numb.
Burnt grey it flew inside the eyes,
the past deeds came so live.
Bloody red the white spaces turned.
Pupils dilated eyelids blinked close.
Life got a standstill in the puff,
just smoke reeled in the air above.
29 comments:
The few lines speak a lot.
Loved it
I love the way you play with words:)
Lovely.
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Nicely written :)
i am not a smoker but you caught the "moment" in the puff ~
nice to meet you~
Inimical. I was torn between thinking it just a cigarette puff and perhaps something more sinister.
Hey, Hi
seems so much like me...
;-)
nostalgic waves of smoke enthrills n engulfs my being...
Regards,
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Excellent write on the picture. Very real feeling.
numbing moment. admirable write :)
beautiful.
abstract and poetic words.
This is remarkable...
Ah, I have found your poetry. Excellent. My I add your site to my blog? I have a few special places I love. Great Poem...
Melanie
PUFFED.....intriguing words....nice write...n glad to see u back...:)
this is awesome. great work
Very, very dark... Tried to see where the image came from but the link wouldn't work... Like it, though it's a bit on the dark side for me (wish I could write dark like that). Great read though!
On first read, it's is picture of what it's like standing in a room full of smokers. Very interesting poem, the initial impression transforms into that of being choked by old lingering bad memories or perhaps guilt.
@Red Handed
After a longtime..welcome back.. :)
Glad they could mean to you..Thank you red :)
@tarunima
Wish to go on till you are ready to witness the play :)
Thank you so much for the honor..will take it up soon dear :)..glad to receive such an honor and knowing about my blog to being mysterious :)
@Valli
thank you!
@Heaven
Nor am i..
Thank you!
It was nice to meet you too my dear :)
@mindsinger
Indeed you got the right word :)
Wherever it takes just fly away like the Puff :) ..
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming..
Very vivid poetry this. Love the power of the description. Though I don't smoke there are times I've understood the same feeling I think.
The Lonely Recluse.
I really enjoyed this - it spoke to me a lot, I've definitely been there before. Great work!
I have to say I especially enjoyed this as I also chose a moment involving cigarettes as my entry for this week. Very nicely capture and I love the image with it.
Nicely written!
its a powerful description cos one puff cud easily mean that a fire was lit and puff up in smoke it goes....
I does relief the fear of the claustrophobic emotions...but how long will it??
Superb writing Alcina!
Great poem! It captures the smoker's enjoyment well.
Nice Alcina...I remain a fan...Great pic too
While I have never been a smoker this is beautiful and vivid loved it!
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