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Thursday, August 25, 2011

Consume..

This entry has been submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally Week 50!
Holding tightly but with a touch so gentle.
Caress through skin enthralls and enchants.
Trickling joys through every pore,
washing the soul with care and love.
A lovely whisper through the dark night,
and as soon as the words echo,
millions of fireflies light up the sky.
Swirling scent of roses and milk in air,
dropped together they are in a pond of glee.
Sensuous and intricate arousing touches,
nails digging deep and bites getting wild.
Consuming breathes and palpitating collisions.
Clasping you tight and you play with her hairs.
Gore drips down heavily from the bites and digs.
Bloody ordeal craving goes intensifying with each prick.
Instilling through her a passion flows,
sharing through him and compassion beholds.
Pleading for every bruise and cut.
She enjoys the marks showered upon her.
Moving in mysterious ways through the paths,
it is making the night go slow, 
giving it an eternal last....



41 comments:

Scarlet said...

lust and gore and bloody ordeal.. a combustion of lovemaking you described here...

if i may suggest that perhaps you can break it up with additional lines to "breathe" and give your reader time to savor each line...

your passion sizzles here ~

Daydreamertoo said...

Ooooo Passion. Hot, it's almost sizzling.

Blasphemous Aesthete said...

You remind me of someone from history, Jodhabai. She was one seductress who had enchanted her lord that he seldom looked over her, and she eventually rose to power.

Nice post.


Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete

Eon Heath said...

Hey, Hi
sensous? hmmmm....nice...a moment of ecstasy...

Anonymous said...

I like this! Captures the passion, the emotion that rises and falls when two lovers consume one another. Nice imagery and choice of words! ... thank you for sharing! :)

"A lovely whisper through the dark night,
and as soon as the words echo,
millions of fireflies light up the sky." -- my favorite line. ;) ... I have this thing for fireflies.... and you described it for me well. :D

Saru Singhal said...

Expression at its best!

the other side of me said...

whoaaaaaa..very sensual post :P

Millions of fireflies light up the sky *Lovely*

<3<3<3

Anonymous said...

You have a real talent for wordcraft. This piece had me in a trance

Anonymous said...

Passionate! Yeah, that's the word.

Anonymous said...

love it! and glad to be of acquaintance through thursdays rally.. my posting this week.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/strength-of-faith/

CC Champagne said...

Loved the words and got really caught up in this. Towards the end it scared me a little, though... Unexpected! Thank you!

Curl Jung said...

Wow.
That was something arousing!

Vaisakhi said...

super wild...:P...nicely worded...:)

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

lovely sentiments,
enjoyed it,

Anonymous said...

Nice work!

The Lonely Recluse. said...

Wow, the stark difference between the first half, where it is just a sensual poem, to the second part where it turns more violent is really powerful. Reading it through the first time, at 2:45 am (half asleep sorry), the transformation really stopped me and made me check what I'd just been reading. Powerful.
The Lonely Recluse.

Alcina said...

@Jidhu
Thank you!

Alcina said...

@Heaven
will try the next time surely if i write something like this :P
Thank you!

Alcina said...

@Daydreamtoo
Oh! i can guess it so well from your comment. :)
Thanx!

Alcina said...

@Blasphemous Aesthete
Oh! wow that was too huge a comparison :P
Thank you!

Alcina said...

@Eon Heath
sensuous or not that is for you to decide then why ask me the question? :)

Thank you*

*Conditions apply

Alcina said...

@kweschn
Thanks a ton and can feel that you read with whole attention ;)!

Alcina said...

@Saru Singhal
:) .. as you watch so you see.

ASHISH BARDHAN said...

Aww .. It was so romantic....
Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!

It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!

Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/

some of my Haiku Collections
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/creative-challenges/the-haiku-challenge/

and also, on my very recent Work as well
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/india-of-my-dream/

!!! Happy Rally !!!
Cheers !!

Fatima said...

Love lust and ecstasy combined in one...the sensual touches and the soulful sighs..fills the night that's going by!

Sometimes even a word is enough to rekindle the passion and touch feels so small in comparison to it!

Nice one girl :)

Take Care.

Alcina said...

@the other side of me
Thank you my dear cutie pie..
Glad that you liked it!

Alcina said...

@respectandacceptance
Oh!That was a huge compliment thanks a lot.

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@mihirvatsa
Thank you.

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@fiveloaf
thank you.

Alcina said...

@CC Champagne
Thank you for those lovely words..and you are welcome.

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@Hamza Bin Ladin
Hmm..that is a unique comment will keep in mind.Thank you very much!

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@vaisakhi
LOl..thanx..the message is well conveyed then i suppose :P

Alcina said...

@The Cello Strings
Thank you!

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@antomaniax
Thanx!

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@The Lonely Recluse
Oh!Glad that it was such that it made you revise what had missed.
Thank you very much.

Alcina said...

@ASHISH BARDHAN
Thank you very much..!

Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!

Alcina said...

@Fatima
Thank you so much for those insights of your feelings after reading it.

Kay said...

Lust and passion drip from each word. What an amazing piece!


http://kaysalady.wordpress.com/2011/08/30/my-mind-is-frozen/

Anonymous said...

Hot and steamy!

Lord Emmanuel said...

An imaginative piece indeed. I love this line: 'Trickling joys through every pore...'

Cheers!

Ann LeFlore said...

Romantic and full of feeling. Thank you for my first rally I was invited today I submitted http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/01/life-memories/