This entry has been submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally Week 50!
Holding tightly but with a touch so gentle.
Caress through skin enthralls and enchants.
Trickling joys through every pore,
washing the soul with care and love.
A lovely whisper through the dark night,
and as soon as the words echo,
millions of fireflies light up the sky.
Swirling scent of roses and milk in air,
dropped together they are in a pond of glee.
Sensuous and intricate arousing touches,
nails digging deep and bites getting wild.
Consuming breathes and palpitating collisions.
Clasping you tight and you play with her hairs.
Gore drips down heavily from the bites and digs.
Bloody ordeal craving goes intensifying with each prick.
Instilling through her a passion flows,
sharing through him and compassion beholds.
Pleading for every bruise and cut.
She enjoys the marks showered upon her.
Moving in mysterious ways through the paths,
it is making the night go slow,
giving it an eternal last....
41 comments:
lust and gore and bloody ordeal.. a combustion of lovemaking you described here...
if i may suggest that perhaps you can break it up with additional lines to "breathe" and give your reader time to savor each line...
your passion sizzles here ~
Ooooo Passion. Hot, it's almost sizzling.
You remind me of someone from history, Jodhabai. She was one seductress who had enchanted her lord that he seldom looked over her, and she eventually rose to power.
Nice post.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
Hey, Hi
sensous? hmmmm....nice...a moment of ecstasy...
I like this! Captures the passion, the emotion that rises and falls when two lovers consume one another. Nice imagery and choice of words! ... thank you for sharing! :)
"A lovely whisper through the dark night,
and as soon as the words echo,
millions of fireflies light up the sky." -- my favorite line. ;) ... I have this thing for fireflies.... and you described it for me well. :D
Expression at its best!
whoaaaaaa..very sensual post :P
Millions of fireflies light up the sky *Lovely*
<3<3<3
You have a real talent for wordcraft. This piece had me in a trance
Passionate! Yeah, that's the word.
love it! and glad to be of acquaintance through thursdays rally.. my posting this week.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/strength-of-faith/
Loved the words and got really caught up in this. Towards the end it scared me a little, though... Unexpected! Thank you!
Wow.
That was something arousing!
super wild...:P...nicely worded...:)
lovely sentiments,
enjoyed it,
Nice work!
Wow, the stark difference between the first half, where it is just a sensual poem, to the second part where it turns more violent is really powerful. Reading it through the first time, at 2:45 am (half asleep sorry), the transformation really stopped me and made me check what I'd just been reading. Powerful.
The Lonely Recluse.
@Jidhu
Thank you!
@Heaven
will try the next time surely if i write something like this :P
Thank you!
@Daydreamtoo
Oh! i can guess it so well from your comment. :)
Thanx!
@Blasphemous Aesthete
Oh! wow that was too huge a comparison :P
Thank you!
@Eon Heath
sensuous or not that is for you to decide then why ask me the question? :)
Thank you*
*Conditions apply
@kweschn
Thanks a ton and can feel that you read with whole attention ;)!
@Saru Singhal
:) .. as you watch so you see.
Aww .. It was so romantic....
Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!
It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!
Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/
some of my Haiku Collections
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/creative-challenges/the-haiku-challenge/
and also, on my very recent Work as well
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/india-of-my-dream/
!!! Happy Rally !!!
Cheers !!
Love lust and ecstasy combined in one...the sensual touches and the soulful sighs..fills the night that's going by!
Sometimes even a word is enough to rekindle the passion and touch feels so small in comparison to it!
Nice one girl :)
Take Care.
@the other side of me
Thank you my dear cutie pie..
Glad that you liked it!
@respectandacceptance
Oh!That was a huge compliment thanks a lot.
Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!
@mihirvatsa
Thank you.
Hope you had a happy visit here
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@fiveloaf
thank you.
@CC Champagne
Thank you for those lovely words..and you are welcome.
Hope you had a happy visit here
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@Hamza Bin Ladin
Hmm..that is a unique comment will keep in mind.Thank you very much!
Hope you had a happy visit here
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@vaisakhi
LOl..thanx..the message is well conveyed then i suppose :P
@The Cello Strings
Thank you!
Hope you had a happy visit here
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@antomaniax
Thanx!
Hope you had a happy visit here
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@The Lonely Recluse
Oh!Glad that it was such that it made you revise what had missed.
Thank you very much.
@ASHISH BARDHAN
Thank you very much..!
Hope you had a happy visit here
Keep chiming!
@Fatima
Thank you so much for those insights of your feelings after reading it.
Lust and passion drip from each word. What an amazing piece!
http://kaysalady.wordpress.com/2011/08/30/my-mind-is-frozen/
Hot and steamy!
An imaginative piece indeed. I love this line: 'Trickling joys through every pore...'
Cheers!
Romantic and full of feeling. Thank you for my first rally I was invited today I submitted http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/01/life-memories/
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