It's eating me up!
The pain inside left despised.
Mortality clutches to my skin tight.
Jealousy is turning dark,
love is far from reigning.
Immortal bliss is hard in find.
The icy touch on neck,
the cold hands entwined.
I am waiting for my turn and right time..
14 comments:
i liked the way you expressed despondency in your poem..
and the last line is powerful,i liked it!!
nice yaar.... cn feel d pain behind dat :)
nice write...sad...dark...yet as usual a pleasure to read....but y so deprssd???...hope its nothin persnl..:)
nice write...sad...dark...yet as usual a pleasure to read....but y so deprssd???...hope its nothin persnl..:)
nd the right time will surely come but before that live :D
pardon my ignorance in case i dint decipher the lines correctly
i read you after long time..... bt really it really love the way you define your feelings .....nice picture also says everything ....
Jai ho Mangalmay ho
Wow. Deep and dark. I can't figure out if you just lost a love, lost him/her to death, or...? But I love that it confuses me. :)
And just while I was reading this post, my computer playlist decided to play the song for me...
I'm waiting till the shine wears off...
Coldplay- Lost.
:)
Analogy.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
The poem is dark yet pretty strong..:)Nicely written as always :) Hope you doing great.
Hey, Hi
darkness re personified. cold. nice.
:)
Regards,
The Silhouette...
Painful and alluring, I could almost feel that icy touch on my neck. I can relate to these feelings. Powerful words. I do hope the right time comes soon so that the pain will cease to exist.
Dark poem, although I enjoyed it! It's true how jealousy can turn a person dark.
Indeed, its the wait and right time.
Really good :)
@All
Thanks..
@Vaisakhi
It's a poem and it's a world you create..nothing personal until i mention...so nice of you for the concerns..
@Red handed
it's alrite girl..take as and how it comes to you!
@Jay and poetryofasian
Hope you had a happy visit here!
keep chiming!
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