This entry is submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally Week 46!
Entropic the heartbeat conveyed a little less.
The eyes closed in a haze.
Advancement towards the future seemed crashing,
hallucinating light of knowledge dwindling.
With the playing liquid in hand,
the voice hummed a tone.
Pulling her hands;
he laid themselves in moonlight.
Twisting her hairs around his fingers,
he softly placed kiss on her cheeks.
She nudged him a little,
shoved him aside.
But couldn't keep her love from him.
Removing the glass from his hand,
wiping away his tears,
she embraced him in her clasp.
And the night was a pleasure.
The beats fell right in place,
eyes closed with dreams innate.
The future seemed full of bliss,
so delighted he was as she gleaned him.
unexpected drop
rally praises poets dream
acceptance in pride
I nominate Lonely recluse :
26 comments:
I really like this, the flow and sensuality of it is appealing, thank you
Sexy, erotic, lovely. : )
Anticipation with Expectations
I enjoyed reading.
Genebrother
Seductive.
The ending is marvellous, filled with hope, tinged with fear.
enjoyed the story of it. :] xx
Ah! Love! A purely divine abstract and you portrait it so well, Alcina.
the action words in detail make your poem very real, visual, and heart warming.
well done.
:)
Full of love, care and emotions. Nice piece of writing.
feelings of longing,love well conveyed!
lovely write:)
Hey, Hi
Woh shaam bhi kya shaam hogi..
:)
Regards,
Eon Heath
And love moves through my days, in mysterious ways. :D
The see sawing between a dark and a love post, I might say I kind of miss that. But now the hues are a lovelier mellow. :)
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
A beautiful poem Alcina. Loved how the words lay on the page, it's actually given me some inspiration fo an experiment at a poem, so thank you for that. A beautiful representation of the topic, loved the lines
"But couldn't keep her love from him.
Removing the glass from his hand,
wiping away his tears,
she embraced him in her clasp"
The Lonely Recluse.
Love feelings, always nice to read about love!
I was taken with the first line its beautiful. I agree with what's been said the sensuality, the romantic feel the poem has such an enveloping aura
The happily ever after ending...
I love your beautifully crafted lines!
nice writting... keep on writing...
Very sensual. Also, you've captured the forgetful embrace of the moment by the lovers perfectly. Good job! :D
Loving the constant contrast of light and dark, love and fear. Well penned.
Lets see, subject matter was clear, and easliy understood without losing its creativity, over all strong didn't weaken at one point. Good job Pleasure to meet you and thanks for swinging by my blog.
No feeling is without cause,
Shoeless
Hey darling
Beatifully written..love it
Its romantic too ;)
too romantic.. here is my cute tune on nature
Someone is Special
and I remember the cautious yet excited beating of my heart. wonderful write :)
very beautiful..
This piece flows beautifully. Well done.
was he crying, that's quite an imagination.
Nice girl with the cat, I like the attitude :-)
Nice work alcina!!!
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