Here is my first attempt at 55 Fiction.Let's know it from you does it make sense or not :/
What am i doing on this hospital bed Alex?
Sweetheart don't panic it's alright.
Alex i have a good news for you.
What is it Zysha?
I am pregnant!
Alex kisses her forehead.
Alex kisses her forehead.
The doctor enters there room and says
"Sorry we could not save the baby."
He hugs her and sobs fill the air.
30 comments:
This is sad :(
Hey its very nice, wow..exactly 55 words :P
well,i would like to say its a great first attempt
brutal!! ouch!
sad but they hav each other at least
Sad, but beautiful. At least they have each other. :)
Oh and thank you for the tag, your's was quite interesting, but don't you think a few questions are a little girlish for me to answer? :P
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
wow.... nice yaar.... too gud... just few lines bt more meanings in it :)
Oh.that's painful..but really good attempt. :)
Hey, Hi
nice.
:)
Regards,
The Silhouette...
its good, but sad..
The power of brevity...wish it was a happy ending.
ohhh that is sad. really sad .. but good first attempt at 55 fiction ..
Bikram's
thats sad:((
but you did a good job with just 55 words:)
:'(
emotions in few words
The loss of a precious one... painful..
55 word fiction is a challenge!!!
nicely written..tried my hands on a few of em myself some time back.
:)
good flow of words.. check my poems at http://achu89.blogspot.com/search/label/La%20artiste
@IAMJOROSS
Everything is not as wished :)..Cheer up!
@theothersideofme
Awwie girl you counted :) ..thanks sweetheart..
@Red Handed
Attached with strings and crashed with fate :) ..it's perfectly worldly!
@desigirl
nice perception..you'll rise high ;)
@Blasphemous Aesthete
Leave the girly ones :P Simple!
@Anjali
Nice to know you deciphered it well..thanks!
@Sunakshi
Thanks you dear!
@Eon Heath
Thank you*
*Conditions Apply
@Raghu
It's good to be sad.. :P
Okey sorry for the Pj..hmm..its the way you perceive.
@Alka Gurha
Watch carefully and you may find one!
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming..
@Bikramjit
Thank you!
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming..
@tarunima
thank you dear
@Beyond Horizon
Aww..cheer up dear!
thank you..
@Lilangel
Indeed!
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