This poem is submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally 53!
Ruffled up countenance.
Ruffled up countenance.
Cascading hairs fall down.
A rhythmic caress,
ticklish touches,
a smile so naughty,
a pounce so wild.
The heavy breathing,
merged with pulsating soul.
Cold skin collides!
Becoming sweaty;
in the bloody ordeal of,
pinching..scratching..tearing..biting..
Temptation of the trickle,
drawing beats closer.
Crimson beads fall joyously all around and over.
Fueling the residing passion,lust and anger.
A seemingly last blow silences it all.
Stares grown warm shared with each other.
Hunger rests upon hunger,
smothering over one another.
Tightening the grips,
was it just the teaser?
32 comments:
Oooh like this, teaser. Captures the mood of foreplay well:)
Phewwww... hot, sensual, sexy write.
Bloody sweat. Mostly good. But sink deeper in detail, your stake is only pricking the pale surface. Write hard.
love it,
very visual and lovely imagery.
Wow. Very contradictory images you've conjured for me. This piece is impacting.
Powerful and erotic write! Very well done.
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/
Bloody sweat. Mostly good. But sink deeper in detail, your stake is only pricking the pale surface. Write hard.
Eeee, actually the narrator is making me nervous or frightened here.
Ah ... passion unleashed!
OK I thought that I posted a comment ... upon passion unleashed. For this is most definitely what I felt.
Passionate poem. Great ending.
Here is my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html
I am not sure if tightening the grip was a tease or not but this is a lovely poem and well penned.
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/
Nice post! I like the intensity.
Keep writing!!
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RoHiT
Love the imagery you use and the photo is excellent. Fills one with longing.
Melanie
@PeeVee
The one who has done it would be able to tell it right :)
But as for now i am not the one :P
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Daydreamertoo
Supposedly it had all the appropriate effects it could have on you ;)
Thank you!
@kshawnedgar
Thats why may be i pose the question Teaser!?
:) and you supposedly the only one answering it..
Thank you and will try getting more details the next time i write something like this.
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@Morning
Thanks a ton :)
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@nicolewian
Thank you so much..
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@Marbles in My Pocket
Thank you :)
@Kathy Bischoping
Very possible as your name in itself tells me you are Bischoping..sorry for the inconvenience caused :|
Hope you overcome the fear soon :)
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@Old Raven
A much more hotter in degree you can say :)
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@Jack Edwards Poetry
Thank you so much..
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@Ann LeFlore
Thank you dear :)
@Rohit Iyer
I didn't intend to be so intense :P
Thank you
@Cassiopeia Rises
Thank you
And surely does :)
This sure is a teaser! :)
this poem was so hot that i sweat profusely! whew! nicely done! filled with passion!
For lack of a better phrase, this is a passionate piece. Nicely done.
@shail
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@crimsoncorvus
Its a pleasure receiving you on my blog first of all :)
Hope the sweat did some good ;)
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@Alex Dissing
That said it all :)
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