"The hardest of all is learning to be a well of affection,and not fountain,to show them that we love them,not when we feel like it,but when they do"

Friday, June 10, 2011

55 Fiction :Accident!

Here is my first attempt at 55 Fiction.Let's know it from you does it make sense or not :/


What am i doing on this hospital bed Alex?
Sweetheart don't panic it's alright.
Alex i have a good news for you.
What is it Zysha?
I am pregnant!
Alex kisses her forehead.
The doctor enters there room and says
 "Sorry we could not save the baby."
He hugs her and sobs fill the air.

30 comments:

IAMJOROSS said...

This is sad :(

the other side of me said...

Hey its very nice, wow..exactly 55 words :P

well,i would like to say its a great first attempt

Red Handed said...

brutal!! ouch!

desigirl said...

sad but they hav each other at least

Blasphemous Aesthete said...

Sad, but beautiful. At least they have each other. :)

Oh and thank you for the tag, your's was quite interesting, but don't you think a few questions are a little girlish for me to answer? :P

Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete

ANJALI.N.KUMAR said...

wow.... nice yaar.... too gud... just few lines bt more meanings in it :)

Sunakshi said...

Oh.that's painful..but really good attempt. :)

Eon Heath said...

Hey, Hi
nice.
:)

Regards,
The Silhouette...

Raghu said...

its good, but sad..

Alka Gurha said...

The power of brevity...wish it was a happy ending.

Bikramjit said...

ohhh that is sad. really sad .. but good first attempt at 55 fiction ..

Bikram's

tarunima said...

thats sad:((
but you did a good job with just 55 words:)

Beyond Horizon said...

:'(
emotions in few words

Lilangel said...

The loss of a precious one... painful..

Sorcerer said...

55 word fiction is a challenge!!!
nicely written..tried my hands on a few of em myself some time back.

:)

Achuthan Raman Chari said...

good flow of words.. check my poems at http://achu89.blogspot.com/search/label/La%20artiste

Alcina said...

@IAMJOROSS
Everything is not as wished :)..Cheer up!

Alcina said...

@theothersideofme
Awwie girl you counted :) ..thanks sweetheart..

Alcina said...

@Red Handed
Attached with strings and crashed with fate :) ..it's perfectly worldly!

Alcina said...

@desigirl
nice perception..you'll rise high ;)

Alcina said...

@Blasphemous Aesthete
Leave the girly ones :P Simple!

Alcina said...

@Anjali
Nice to know you deciphered it well..thanks!

Alcina said...

@Sunakshi
Thanks you dear!

Alcina said...

@Eon Heath
Thank you*
*Conditions Apply

Alcina said...

@Raghu
It's good to be sad.. :P
Okey sorry for the Pj..hmm..its the way you perceive.

Alcina said...

@Alka Gurha
Watch carefully and you may find one!
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming..

Alcina said...

@Bikramjit
Thank you!
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming..

Alcina said...

@tarunima
thank you dear

Alcina said...

@Beyond Horizon
Aww..cheer up dear!
thank you..

Alcina said...

@Lilangel
Indeed!