This Entry is submitted by me for Thursday Poets Rally 41
A bubble of thought rises in his mind,
what if she..
A sigh left his lips in shear disappointment,
what if she..
A finger started writing something on the sand,
what if she..
A smile passed across his face as he saw,
what if she..
A heavenly feeling dawned upon him,
what if she..
She sat there besides him on the sand.
In her white dress,
her trinkets jingling happily.
As she brushed her hairs aside from her eyes,
her eyes met his and she couldn't stop her smile.
A word passed from him to her,
and the thought crossed his mind,
what if she..
She was attracted as if through some unseen energy,
towards his lips her lips brushed and submerged.
She withdrew them and said,
what if i..
His heart skipped a beat or two.
The breeze was silent and calm.
The waves rushed towards their feet.
She got up from there,
started walking away from him.
He murmured to himself,
did I finally say it?
I love you ..does she understand?
He gazed up into the endless sky.
And back on the waves his eyelids closed.
And he said to himself,
what if she..
and saw towards the direction she went..
She stood there,
the most beautiful girl in the universe.
Retracing her steps back,
she stooped low.
Mumbled in his ears,
I love you too..
57 comments:
Very sweet imagination :)
Beautifully composed!
Take care..
yeah...It so happened...I like the title...and yeah poem too....
lovely post dear..
keep writing....
beautiful. I think we are sometimes led to that moment in mysterious ways. In fact, I know we are, but as great as that moment is, and it truly is great, that is just the beginning of something and why not if that happens , why not just enjoy it intstead of thinking too much about what will happen after :))
I hope that doesnt sound tainted in any way!
<3
good one.... :)
n really cool background image... :D
Hey, Hi
the picturissation was simply beautiful...so ful of romancce...nice...
Regards,
The Silhouette...
p.s.- Touched.
Thanks for visiting my blog :)
Ur writing is beautiful as well
Diablesse
:-)
Lips said it for him, in a moments touch, in a moments bliss.
Very nice post.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
so many wat ifs...so many thoughts...beautifully weaved into this piece....loved it like nethin...recently even i m in love with sand...:)
ahan... felt like.. plucking the rose petals each time saying "she loves me".. "she loves me not" waiting till what the last one has to say... :) :)
nice one.. covering feelings from both sides.. hmmm.. seems u had dug deep into how the guys feel ;) always confused :P :P
WOW!!! Even I was thinking what if she...and a beautiful end to the poem but a beginning for the souls...
There is always something magical in your words! :)
awwwwwww cute :)
Really beautiful..u have an eye for details!
it is beautiful.. i was nervous damn nervous when i talked to her for the first time
Lovely :)
OMG,
This is so nice..
The words comes alive in my mind!!!!!!
I would say it's one of your best
@Simran
Thank you dear :)
@Hemu di
^_^ thanx
@rivercat
Nope it doesn't sound tainted.. This is true..thank you :)
@Ninu
Thank you so much :)
@Eon
Great that it could stir the romanticism ;)
P.S.-So glad about this :)
@Diablesse
thank you!
@Manpreet
Thank you..Wish the same for you :)
@Blasphemous Aesthete
:))
thanx
@Vaisakhi
After all It's the summer thats reigning ;)
Thank you so much
@Rup
Hahaha..are you sure guys won't do anything to you when you write this about them :P
And the feeling is yes so much like it :)
Glad you noticed the details ;)
thank you!
@Beyond horizon
After all it's the magical island of ALCINA :)
Thanks a ton :)
@Red Handed
I am sure it's the only one with details :P
Thank youuu :D
@Lilangel
Just like your name :)
Thank you dear
@Blood Is Red
hope you enjoyed the presentation :)
Thank you so so much :)
@Beyond
Haahaha..you had the dig into the nervousness once more after the read i suppose :)
Thank you
Hope you had a happy visit here!
Keep chiming!
apki poem pad ke do lines yad aa rhi hai....
milne waloo ko furshten thi bahut....jab mere pss waqt thoda tha...!!!
and sorry for cricke tstuff bt dear we r winner!! i hope u like other staff....
goood work stay keep going...
Jai HO mangalmay ho
nice write~ my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
well expressed character.
thanks for sharing..
Happy Rally.
Visiting your blog is a whole experience and a pleasure. Your background photo is stunning, your poetry evocative and the music captures the mood beautifully.
Thank you :)
Truthful. Beautiful. Captivating.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/04/07/lovers-we-are-now/
Sweet doubts and a sweeter answer. Lovely poem.
Awesome words.. beautiful.
thanks for sharing.
aw! Sweet love! beautiful write :)
perfect...
the set, characters, emotions, thoughts, words...
everything.. simply perfect
So beautiful and innocent! Emotions captured perfectly... It's like the first love... Perfect!
There's a touching innocence in this poem..
cheers,
Lovely.. Beautiful.. Awesome.. Luv th feelin..
@Vish
thank you :)
@fiveloaf
:)
hope you had a happy visit here!
keep chiming!
@jingle
Thank you so much..my pleasure
@glh
So glad after reading your comment..
It was my pleasure..
thanx
hope you had happy visit here!!
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@tasithoughts
Thank you..
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@Butterflies of time
thank you..
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@iambeingme
:)
Thank you!
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@Anonymous
Thanks :)
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@Sri Sri
Thanks a ton..
Hope you had a happy visit here!!
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@magdalenahermanstories
It is the first love.. :)
thank you!
hope you had a happy visit here!!
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@indiwriter
:) ..glad you could find it
hope you had a happy visit here!!
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@Raghu
Glad you could luv it :)
Thank you
what wonderful repetition in that opening verse, Alcina! well versed :D
Rally Week 41 - My Poetry
Beautiful and romantic. I love your style.
Awww...how beautiful! It was so vivid I could actually "see" what was happening as I read it. Lovely!!
The bliss of what if I do too after innumerable what if is something that is beyond my realm and words!
Touched is the only close word :)
Dunno how I missed this!!
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